tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2902783052984261962.post1610980293154575964..comments2010-09-17T23:46:07.781-07:00Comments on Chris Sayer: Journalism: chris_sayerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13242798159527351281noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2902783052984261962.post-85588101113677684942007-10-20T05:50:00.000-07:002007-10-20T05:50:00.000-07:00Structure: Well written in inverted pyramid formul...Structure: Well written in inverted pyramid formula. Your intro is tight and paragraphs of a suitable length for the most part. <BR/><BR/>Audience: A good story, very suitable for your audience, although it would have been good to hear more from Falmouth students and perhaps the FXU.<BR/><BR/>Accuracy: You haven’t sourced the key claim of your story. Can you attribute the rate rise to the student loan company? <BR/><BR/>Spelling: Be careful. You have made a number of errors, one of which is in your intro.<BR/><BR/>Original research and quotes: It seems that you have lifted some quotes from Facebook here. When you lift quotes get into the habit of saying where they are from. For balance you need a quote from the authority that has decided to increase interest rates. More research would have strengthened this story – it might be one well worth following up.<BR/><BR/>Punctuation: Watch this, especially around quotes<BR/><BR/>Comment/opinion: No place for this in news so your last par is unnecessary, but also unclear. What are you actually saying – is it that most students are in favour of the change? In a way it knocks down your story.Annehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06064302274544791201noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2902783052984261962.post-48787822524697138732007-10-16T01:41:00.000-07:002007-10-16T01:41:00.000-07:00Really like the facebook approatch to peoples reac...Really like the facebook approatch to peoples reaction. Good use of quotes, especially the James Hunter one. Like the ending!miahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16712981477614685917noreply@blogger.com