tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2902783052984261962.post293111639618727569..comments2010-09-17T23:46:07.781-07:00Comments on Chris Sayer: Journalism: chris_sayerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13242798159527351281noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2902783052984261962.post-59921826970939740342007-10-20T06:39:00.000-07:002007-10-20T06:39:00.000-07:00Structure: Your intro is tight and tells the story...Structure: Your intro is tight and tells the story but could be more powerful. The newsworthiness of this is in the detail of the crime, which you have left until paragraph two. <BR/>Avoid use of adjectives such as ‘brutally’ (murdered). You don’t need to hype-up the story.<BR/><BR/>Balance: A well-balanced report although you haven’t mentioned Martin’s plea. <BR/><BR/>Audience: This is written appropriately for a national audience.<BR/><BR/>Punctuation: Again, look at the punctuation rules around quotes.<BR/><BR/>Quotes: You have used these appropriately but see above.Annehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06064302274544791201noreply@blogger.com